A SH AI EL

Self-Published

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Description

Allen Smith, a jaded and foul-mouthed corporate developer ends up in a fantasy world. Unfortunately, this world is much more realistic than his expectations. What could possibly go wrong?

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2018
Author: TheHaloa

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.3/ 5.0
Followers: 829
Views: 731,733

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Community Reviews(10)

lousy goat OlavRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I started reading today, couldn't put it away until I caught up to the last chapter. That should tell you everything!
A 30 years old bitter bastard gets thrown into a realistic magic word and, somehow, despite the constants complaints and a few glaring personality flaws, his story is engrossing to follow.
GalmRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Realistic transported into another world story. A reaally well made not so young, apathetic mc meets non rpg-like magic world. Characters have actual character something sadly so rare here.
ryladineRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
The story is well written and seems to be well planned, without the plot jumping you see with a lot of stories here.
The grammar is very good, with only a few errors here and there that could easilly be typos.
Finally the character development is pretty good. While not enough to make me fall in love with all the characters they advance in skill logically without sudden leaps and bounds. Additionaly, even though I can't say the side characters all have depth, they stay consistent which is more than can be said of many stories.
SinTomRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Oh man, how is it, that all good stories have like one chapter.
Hurry up man, I really like this story of yours!
Thx for your hard work and effort!
flinsRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
A great read as of chapter 39
it starts a bit stiff, but when it starts rolling it just keeps on going and i hope it will continues to do so. so square away some time and read what this author has to offer. and you will be happier for it
side note: this is not an insta OP MC from the realm of shit writing so if it dosent catch you in the first chapter please try atleast two more before giving up on it
qelvishRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
i very much enjoyed your fiction and appreciate your efforts
knifexthriveRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
enjoyable story, good main character building and side character depth.
note: the frusturation you feel for the mc shows how much you care not how bad the story is, and humor in this story in this story ranges from brilliant to cliche which i consider to be a plus.
thanks for the hard work author.
CestarianRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
The biggest shortcoming of this story is it's main character, or more specifically it's that the main character is a complete pushover, more or less he is betacuck personified. There are several times in the story so far where he is either being negotiated with or being wronged by people of higher status than him.
Yet in each of these he caves in, one time he caves in because someone jiggles boobs in his face a little bit (not even intentionally), another time he just sits there and takes his punishment like a bitch for crimes mostly committed against him, and then at another he caves because he clearly doesn't know how to not cave. These are just the major ones, there's a lot more minor ones, the last one being chapter 56 where I stopped reading (all caught up at the time of this writing)
All in all the thing that bugs me about him is that, he's a pretty high tier fighter, I wouldn't say OP but he's like a fairly high ranked adventurer, and growing, from a relatively early point in the story, his capabilities should not make him a pushover.
There's nothing really special about the protagonist I suppose being easy to bully is his only defining trait. He doesn't play his cards right, he doesn't even play his cards well, there's really not much more to say about it.
The other characters are all equally shallow, especially the unnamed background characters who go around pestering strangers for stories. Seriously, people don't do that. And besides his circle of friends and close acquaintances other people generally are just a bunch of dicks.
Besides the shortcomings of the characters though, the story is actually half decent, the world is impressively well fleshed out, it's what kept me reading, although the technology level of the world is just middle ages tier stuff, the mages aren't hobos who don't know what fire is, they have a fairly decent understanding of the world compared to other similar stories, which is definitely a plus cus it doesn't allow the MC to become
Nicholas MorganRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
I did not like the style of the dialogue ...it felt disjointed and really affected the immersion. The ease at which the communication issue the MC has is solved is also not believeable, as there are no world building elements that would ground it; the first time at combat is also a similar issue.
Discliamer: This is a personal and biased perspective based on things I did not like. As it was not enjoyable to read, I cannot say if it will get better. But in my reading experience, they usualy don't.
pewpewcachooRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
The dialogue in the story is really weird. instead of doing it "like this." It is done, [Like this.] Another thing with it, the author doesn't add anything to it. An example would be..
Vargas looked at the distance.
「Vargas: That dwarf... he drinks too much.」
This could be done better and more smooth if it was written like...
Vargas looked in the direction Yusdrolir had walked and muttered, "That dwarf... he drinks too much."
Your writing overall is good and the grammar seems good. Just need to work on dialogue more.