A random pokemon journey

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Alexander was a fairly normal guy on earth or at least he hoped so. Somehow though he had gone his entire life without playing a single pokemon game or watching any of the anime. That changed when his friends kept pestering him about it and he finally gave in and purchased a few of the games that came highly recommended such as emerald , fire red , platinum and heart gold. He also bought a cheap ds lite to play all of them when he was off work. Unfortunately he was struck by lightning the moment he finished the last of them and died. He ended up awakening in a small cave at the foot of a mountain forest and learned he had a system to help him in this new and very dangerous world.

AUTHOR Note-------This story will only be taking place in the world before the fairy type came out so only those regions exist in this version of the pokemon world. There may also maybe possibly an actual romantic option but I haven't decided yet , also no harems.I would like to add that everything with the system is RNG based so I have no control over it.

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Status: Completed
Year: 2023
Author: Loskro

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.0/ 5.0
Followers: 492
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Community Reviews(9)

zachbrownRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I don't always write a review but this one deserves it. A fantastic new series that changes the way the reader looks at the original world this book is made from. I eagerly look forward to future chapters and recommend everyone to read. The grammar is good, some spots could use a little rework but it is not bad by any means and the pacing is smooth. nothing is rushed in this story so you can easily follow what is happening. every new twist and turn is fun and well described. Honestly it makes you just eager for more.
SoulessRedRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Overall: I'm about a 1/4 the way through the posted chapters and have seen what some of the other posted reviews have pointed out. Honestly it's not that big of a deal for me. Overall it's a solid story so far that blends a RPG system with pokéland. Author states the system given abilities, items and skills are all random via a wheel spin. Makes a blend of stuff not usable for the character right now (ie knowledge on farming and masonry) and things that are very op but used in more or less believable ways. It is fiction and a power trip after all.
Style: formatting definitely throws your reading pace off until you figure it out but it's not horrendous by any means. Just not normal separation when moving from one character speaking to another.
Story: I enjoy the reality spin the author has put in place. Pokemon and people eat meat to live, killing and weapons are a thing and aren't apologized for. I get most "modern" or "1st world" countries are fairly safe and danger for an average citizen isn't typical. This is not the case in pokéland even though most of the material, both cannon and fanfic, gloss over it. Loskro chooses not to and I think that's throwing some people. Not grim dark by any means just upfront and unapologetic.
Character: I don't have a problem with the MC. Some of the other reviews say he complains about the system (he does) and I think most any person would when getting some random skill or item that is not usable or needed. MC does get some really good and OP things that he's glad to have and then some random stuff that he complains about. Again that's human nature and doesn't bother me. A lot of comments on MC being an asshole and personality swinging back and forth once getting to a town. I don't see it personally. He acts for his interests and is accommodating to people that can help him with that and doesn't have a reason to be overly nice to others.
MC is challenged to a battle by a new trainer, tells the guy it's not a good idea and the guy
Gavin TurlockRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
Needs to be edited recommend something like grammarly as the story is sound but spelling errors really break up the readability. The story also seems to be missing paragraphs or transition sentences which can make the story feel choppy and disjointed. Being clear with the how abilities are decided as well as items would help the story feel less deliberate. Potentially make a prologue with the stat sheets?
BobSnaveRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
It is a decent read overall, not bad, but also not great. More of a "turn off your thoughts" type of read, but its still enjoyable.
MC isnt the most likeable person and gets OP way to quickly. Not much suspense as you know hes overpowered and will easily overcome whatever he has to. Got a little annoyed at the MC for consistently complaining about the abilities he gets, even though pretty much everything is handed to him.
Overall, id say read it if you want a Pokémon story but have nothing left to read, but there are better fanfics out there.
TriangleKayes08Royal Road
★★ 2.0
It's interesting at first, but the progress the MC makes is too much too soon, and not well balanced with plot pacing.
The randomizations/variation rules of the Pokemon system in this power fantasy are WAY too soft. Man just says, electric Charmander is a Charmander with Electabuzz coloration and magically visible lightning on its tail. Starfall has more involved type variations (electric Charmander has electrified arms); this just feels kinda lazy. Additionally, there's all the king, alpha stuff, but then there's like 30 unnamed variations aside from those and it all just gets way too out of hand. There needs to be harder limits on how many, like just size, ivs, and natures are already good enough. No need for the extra tiering, just go beyond basic iv limits to let's say 100 or even 200 (compared to the 31 default), or even ev limits. All the extra categories are really redundant. There's this dissonant mix of hard and soft power tiering systems that needs fixing imo.
Character-wise, the Pokemon very quickly lose any focus from the story and the development of moves and combos is left entirely up to the Pokemon to pull out from their butts; there are no cases of the MC actually demonstrating coaching of any kind beyond psychological self help bs and applying pressure via forcing a Pokemon to fight.
I actually don't care that there's so much progression, except that, even for a power fantasy, the progress happens almost entirely off screen. There's no real discussion of the munchkin path, and that makes the progress feel REALLY flat after he comes into contact with people.
That's the worst part. Once other people are introduced, the MC becomes a total misanthrope, but we don't see the MC connecting with his pokemon as an alternative. The author keeps introducing new humans that we know the MC is going to hate and blow off like actual NPCs. This is turning into an incredibly boring walkthrough of a hacked version of Pokemon R/S.
dtgRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
Reads like a bad Chinese xianxia novel. He goes around killing or crippling anyone who so much as looks at him wrong. In one scene he is killing pidgey and describing how tasty they are. A few chapters later he kills like 20 people because they treated eevee poorly......
CosmicpowerRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
The main character is propped up by plot armor.
The main character complains about the system screwing him, when its only beneficial.
The main character gets power to easy.
The main character has apathy problems even after being placed in the world of Pokemon....
The main character is handed amazing items one after the other, with little to no work for them.
anaustralianwriterRoyal Road
★ 1.0
The story starts out with the MC getting one of the strongest pseudo legendary in both lore and in-game, then getting a straight-up legendary Pokemon a handful of chapters later. He also goes from being a normal person into Sir Thaddeus Thundercock at this time. He's now a giant of a man with bulging muscles who makes every woman blush whenever they see him. Never mind he would look like a roided-out junkie irl, system magic makes him perfect.
Oh yeah, all his Pokemon are super rare variants as well, other than the fucking legendary. Even the low-level catterpie he has, who has a defence stat as high as his pseudo that is a midgame threat atm, could probably take out most trainers singlehandedly. Apparently, he just knows how to train them better than the literal Pokemon professor. He's just better than everyone like that.
Also, why doesn't everyone instantly hate him? He is just a complete dick. The author is clearly trying to make him seem cool and strong, but honestly, he is just a prick. He can't even bother saying goodbye to someone who clearly views him as a friend. It's literally one word. It would take no effort at all. Literally five minutes out of your day. But nope, he's gotta be a prick to keep up that cool and mysterious look he has going on. He's just not an interesting person, at all. Considering his Pokemon have no personality whatsoever outside of the first handful of chapters, all we have to connect to the story is the MC, and I wouldn't give him a second glance if he was dying on the street.
TL;DR, a horrid MC who gets literally everything handed to him on a silver platter, and can't even get his head out of his own ass long enough to say thank you. All his team are super OP and he wins everything effortlessly. Also, every woman in a mile radius wants to fuck him, no matter what.
pewpewcachooRoyal Road
★ 1.0
It started out okay... I had a decent idea of what I was getting into when I started the story and expected it. That said, it just kinda went down hill from there and never really got better.
The MC himself is not great and when he finally started interacting with people, he just turned into a dick sometimes. I understand what the author was trying to go for, I mean they even made a note about it after a chapter... The problem is you basically made the MC unlikable and killed the story for me. Even after I let a lot of other things slide with how the story is written.
Now that I've dropped the story I am going to point out some issues...
The first and glaring issue is the way you formatted the story. Sure after I read ten plus chapters I kinda got used to it, but you should honestly fix it so it's easier for people to read. When you just have quoted "dialogue text in the middle of your paragraphs like this." And then just go on writing more afterwards to either describe something or then switch to another character talking it makes it hard and kind of annoying to read properly. It also breaks immersion and pulls me at least, out of the story.
Then you have the dialogue itself which is not good at all. It was kind of okay at first when he was just talking to his pokemon in the wild. But once he starts interacting with people its bad. I mean really bad in some cases and just not how people talk. Good dialogue should flow like a normal conversation. Most of the MC talking with other people doesn't sound like a normal conversation at all.
As for other people in the story... Well his pokemon seemed okay at first but didn't get fleshed out to much. Then there is the pokemon professor he meets who seems to have no idea about pokemon and didn't have a pokemon... I get it, from the game that's how you met the guy. But if you are trying to make a slightly more grounded pokemon story, you should have made it more believable.
Also don't get my started on his interactions with t