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EscriboRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Peer into the startled and frightful mind of a madman. Want a ride? Strap in.
LitmusRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Things you've done well:
1. Character interaction is a strong point.
2. Pretty good descriptions although you could try to implement more imagery.
3. Character design, you've introduced various aspects of personalities for your characters. Although that could be shown better.
4. You've kept to the basic rule of thumb when dealing with paragraphs. Although you've slipped up once or twice.
5. It kept my attention as I found it interesting, unlike most reincarnation fictions.
Problems:
1. The chapter you recommended me to read felt as if the word count was forced. You've clearly extended what you wrote but you've done it to a slightly unnecessary extent.
2. Your grammar is solid for the most part, but a proofread could be beneficial.
3. In parts of the story/stories I can't really tell if you're going for a third person POV or first person POV. So please make that clearer when writing?
4. You've gone for a common route for reincarnation which battle royale under a god. Now that's really common and somewhat boring, however you're using it in an interesting manner.
Additionally rather than being born as a baby, the character seems his own age. Which is actually nice to see as it means readers can jump straight into the story.