A Novel World

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Description

When a science experiment goes wrong, strange forces step in and change the underlying laws of the universe, simply because they appreciate the entertainment value Humans provide. Watch as Jen Byrnes seeks to learn more about the new world around her, and to become the Mad Scientist she had always aspired to.

With inspiration from Randidly Ghosthound.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2018
Author: solopath

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.4/ 5.0
Followers: 1,105
Views: 345,931

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Community Reviews(10)

LordofthepiesRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Very good grammar. And also story. And it's nice to have a scientist main character who thinks of things in a science-y way. It's a little early on in the story, but I hope things continue on as they are.
Undead WriterRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Love the story. Don’t stop. It’s looks great and I know a lot of people like the way this is going. The slow start is good when you have a good story and a good buildup. I like the cave and the scientist start. I hope you keep going.
DartmorinRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Despite general similarities with other stories like this, namely the apocalyptic litRPGs, i think the author has shown that he is at least competent with character development of the main character, so sorely lacking in Randidly Ghosthound, aware of the general tropes of the genre, at least in the setup, and not a complete hack with regards to grammar.
It clearly isnt edited profesionally, but it is cleanly readable without anything tripping you up, no misplaced words, no misused punctuation and no akward phrasing. The semi-mandatory blue tables are fine, readable and understandale, and are used sparingy to convey new and meaningful imformation.
What we have seen of the story and world building so far is a great fundation. The System takes inspiration from RG with Paths, but it is better explained already than over there.
The MC is in the typical precarious situation at the beginning of the novel to lay the groundwork for their meteoric rise to the top, hopefully, but instead of constant fights and heroic will, it is a more sedate and believable experience, with introspection, and growth not limited to rare chances and unlikely coincidences. Overall, it is much more of a novel, than author wish fullfilment and power fantasies.
The authors also informs you of his plans regarding the shedule, without making hard promises, which i like, because you can expect something, but it isnt like you feel betrayed, if no chapter is released.
All in alll, definitely something to read
ClickPauseRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
This review is based off of what you have done so far, rather than anything else. I may review later on to change or alter my view, but I stick by my view for now.
Style:
I rate this the lowest, but this is less due to the flow of the main story, which is high quality, especially compared to a huge number of stories on RRL, and more to do with the Interlude chapters.
These chapters seem to be heavily related to exposition, and I can't bring myself to engage in these chapters due to the lack of actual depth they contain. They are still reasonably enjoyable, but I would prefer if they were more similar in style to the main story, rather than raw exposition.
In terms of main story style, I love the slow pacing of the story. I would enjoy more actual threat to the main character, as it appears to be very weak right now in that aspect.
The style is probably one of the major reasons people don't like the story, due to its slow burn, kinda chill nature, but in some ways I prefer this to some stories where nothing ever seems to change, just constant combat with the difficulty rising continuously. *cough randidly cough*
Story:
Not much to say from a concept perspective, but delivered quite well. I just find myself enjoying her actual approach to events, where experimentation has real, tangible effects.
Character:
Pretty much the same as style, MC = high, SC = low. If we got to see more Myconid, might be higher. Will have to wait and see.
Grammar:
As good as you'll get on RRL, higher than even some of the Top Rated.
Overall:
This is a highly solid start to the series, with elements of base story building off of which a very good story can grow. We are left groping around in the dark with the main character, and the experience is both engaging and thrilling.
Some will say this story is average, however you have done well to add a unique and fresh perspective to an old and weary formula. I can't wait to see what you do with it.
Endless PavingRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
I have a bit of a bias for the trapped in a vast underworld thing, the underdark is a favourite realm in a lot of classic fantasy journeys. So I’ll try to just be descriptive instead of emotive. The story is a litrpg, one of those where the protagonist almost immediately acquires magic. As is quite hard to avoid considering the temptation. But it wasn’t given freely along with the rpg system; she had to go to some pain and effort to figure it out and even still it is incompehensible enough not to be empowering, which I commend above those systems where magic becomes as easily as a children’s toy.
It’s apocalyptic, yes, but what I see as the main character isn’t out in the fallen world but alone but very lost in a strange and lightless place. If you want some realism with the dangers of spelunking we’ve got that here to as much as you’d want it. Unless you’re even more sadistic towards your fiction heroes. Sensory deprevation, navigating blind, scavanging for food, and complete isolation from most any life despite her explorations. This is a story for you if want to be immersed in that blind loneliness you only get being trapped beneath the world. Adventure truly awaits those who have nothing!
It’s a story of primitive survival, more than it is about a collapsing society thus far. It’s about dealing with being defenseless, foodless, sightless, and nearly hopeless in an unknown underworld very far from any hope of the surface. There are some elements of OP gains in terms of the abilities gained from understandibly rare achievements, but in the face of her circumstances they are less than pitiful against her adversities. Self-teaching magic is a bit incredible with the implied difficulty of said magic system but it’s nothing to be sour over when it isn’t even all that effective at making simple light.
I give it four stars for a decent average story(since ramdom internet raters have no comprehension of scores other than maximum or zero, you gotta go along with the flow
meerschaumRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
A fun read - among one of the few LitRPGs I've seen where the character is a believable person without some towering overpowering character trait that puts them over everyone else.
Also, you can view the whole thing as an allegory on depression if you squink at it. Eh, maybe that's a stretch. But the feeling of being trapped underground without light and recognizing that you'll have to dig yourself out, it resonates.
caby202Royal Road
★★★★ 4.0
You called this an Inspiration from that hound Novel but the only similiaritys I can even see are the systems which he didn't really invent he just copied it himself. You've successfully avoided going down the hole he did with super OP for no reason mc who is going to change the world blah blah.
You seem to be making an attempt at scientist approach but since she's apparently an intern and has likely never done a proper experiment I'm willing to let how she's done most things slip.. cause it could be written like this for the story to play out better
I personally feel like the interludes while a view at the world were done poorly mostly cos of the chosen character. He won't be able to show us anything since he's busying trying to get somewhere and we can still only make speculation.
Othwersie this is a good read for people who dislike blatantly fake mc growth and are willingly to wait for what's to happen.
Someone called you a fulfillment story which you really are not since literally nothing has happened and that's a problem but it's a casual slice of life so far and they complained bout story or plot too. What plot. You don't have one. It's a slice of life experimental mana story. That's it basically.
zeel steelRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
This is wholly average. Not mindnumbingly so, but nothing stands out about it. This feels more like a day to day accounting of the MCs life than a story with an actual plot. The interludes are more interesting than what the MC is doing.
Style score: I'm not really Sure what this means by style, this being my first review, but I'll take it to mean the magic system. Slightly above average, it has potential, but it's not the best i've seen.
Story score: like i've stated, the story is dry and uninspiring. I found my mind wondering as I read it, wanting to do something else.
Grammar score: there are no glaring mistakes.
Character score: we've only been introduced to two characters so far, and they are both alright. They seem like real people with real lives.
I'm on chapter 32 and I do plan to read on, in hopes that it'll somehow pick up the pace, but I'm not thrilled by what I see so far.
pewpewcachooRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
Picked this up because I liked the path system from RGH. This had the system also, or something like it. It is well written but a little chunky, could make the paragraphs a little smaller. Story is ok, writing is decent and grammar is good. The MC walking around in the dark and eating mushrooms was cool.
TheAgeOfTheYakRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
Some people will consider this unduly harsh, seeing as there are lots of stories with decent scores that are still a lot worse out there. I disagree though. There's always going to be people who rate five stars despite barely being able to read at all, so I don't see a reason to hold back with what I consider justified criticism.
I don't want to give an advanced review since I haven't actually finished reading all the chapters, but I'd still like to point out a few things in ruthless honesty.
Style and grammar:
First of all, the writing isn't bad - nor is the flow of the chapters. The style isn't anything special but it certainly doesn't deter in any way from finishing a chapter.
(Technical writing) Style: 2.25/5 (Average [which translates to above average for RR]. Nothing special but not bad either.)
Grammar: 3.75/5 (Good enough. Could still benefit from an editor sparing a glance but loads better than what you usually get to read on this site.)
Story:
Well, I've only managed to finish eight chapters. To some, this type of story might hold some appeal. It doesn't for me personally, but I'm not willing to detract point just for preferences.
Story presentation: 2.5/5 (Questionable decisions early on, including the interlude, but it does its job.)
Story concept: 2/5 (My personal bewilderment about the Author's fascination with darkness might play into this but - in the end - I believe the beginning of the story could have used more polish on the drawing board. It just fails to draw me in.
Plot and story: -/5 (Seeing as I could summarise the first five chapters in four to five sentences, I think it's fair to say that the Author falls into one of the typical beginner's traps: a lacking awareness of the necessity of story and plot. The story might not be too bad, but eating mushrooms and warbling in a place without any light just isn't cutting it for me. Strictly speaking, if I were consequent at this point, I'd have to rate it like 1.5/5 - but I won't.
Characters:
Chara