a new world to call home, as sloths representative

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Description

"So I get 2 freebies and a curse,"

"Yup."

"What's the world like? The one you'll be sending me to?"

"So you know overlord?"

"Shit."

"Yeah, way harder." a girl chosen by the sin of sloth gets transported in the middle of a forest swarming with dangerous monsters. For a bet waged by the physical manifestation of the seven sins. After bearly surviving a month in the forest, she tries to find a place for herself in this mysterious world.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2019
Author: Superfanlee

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.3/ 5.0
Followers: 61
Views: 17,503

Chapters(17 total)

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Community Reviews(1)

SundjinRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
As of chapter seven this is decent. The author listens to feedback when it is given and seems to want to write an interesting story.
Seven chapters aren't a lot to base a review off of, but so far there are a few things I would like to point out to the author.
Overall this is better grammatically speaking than a lot of fiction on this site, once the formatting with paragraphs was fixed.
Story-wise I like where this has the potential to go, there are bigger considerations to be made than just the journey as it is at this moment that could be interesting later.
The problem I have with this piece of fiction is that it seems to be rushing ahead at breakneck speed. I cannot really give an honest review of the story nor the characters as it is right now at chapter seven since there has happened a lot in a very short span of text and this makes it difficult to appraise the depth of story or characters.
No need to rush author, take your time and flesh out the story a bit before rushing to where you want it to go would have to be my main criticism. Then again this might just be my own preference, but it seems somewhat poorly paced as of right now.
Feel free to send me a message if you edit and I will gladly redo my review. :) glhf