A 21 year old man gets a second chance at life after he wasted his life doing nothing.This is a new beginning for a man who wanted a new life.

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edge363Royal Road

★★★★★ 5.0

I know it can be hard to continue writing despite the fire, but you gotta push through man. Not everybody is talented at writing, but we can all agree those that pick up the pens are the ones to become great authors. I know Rowling, Tolkien, and Shakespeare did not appear into the world with the perfect story. I know you didn't either, but if you continue through you will have it someday. People will tell you that you can't, but I'm here to tell you, you can. The only person who can stop you is yourself.
I know a wonderful story is waiting inside you for the world to see. Don't let the hateful reviews and opinions stop you from showing it to the world.
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Onto the story. I agree you need to just slow down and be more descriptive in later chapters. Sometimes it's better to show the reader an event as opposed to letting them imagine it. Just keep it up bro. Try and focus on a small cast of characters and then slowly add traits to them. I know it can suck because we all want our story out as quickly as possible, but the journey is 90% of a story. So focus on that. Try to enjoy the ride more, coast some.
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P.S. Sorry for the tangent. I just keep seeing spiteful people giving out bad reviews left and right. Like they want to stamp out possible authors before they get any footing. I hate it.

bibidesguerresRoyal Road

★★★ 3.0

disappointed ... increasingly, the story evolves in a harem and I hate harem ...
seriously, the teacher, the vampire, elf and what else?
a good start but the rest of the story is a little disappointing with the development where a child under 10 years old is starting to have his harem. it does not make sense.
good luck for the story and thank you for chapters and story

alexanderyouRoyal Road

★★★ 2.5

But I just can't read it because the dialog sounds fake. It also doesn't help that each chapter feels like a run on sentence.

EdwardRoyal Road

★★ 1.5

First Impression: Again, first thing I see is that the author starts the prologue with VERY detailed descriptions of the main character, in this case, he is 1.71m tall. With, or without shoes, I wonder.. -.- Also, he seems to be lying down, so how do we know his height in such detail? Nevermind.. There are far worse things I guess. For example the fact the author forgets to close, and open, quotation marks right at the beginning of the story. The grammar will be amazing..
Next, the main character is an idiot, and the author tries to make the first scene a comedy of some kind. But right later on, he switches sides and goes to the ‘Oh I’m dead, what will my loved ones think’ mood. Well, great. Now we have an idiotic, bipolar overpowered character in the making. Awesome.
Also: A blue sun, that changes color to red when going down, and, I’m guessing the sky is still blue, so we have a blue sun with a blue sky. Wonder how you even see if it is up there -.-

KandoralRoyal Road

★ 0.5

The author had a great idea, and the first few chapters were pretty good, but then suddenly it changed. The characters have no depth, he changed facts in every chapterm The "parents" he introduced first don't even seem like parents (if you read it you will think they are demons....)
Story progression: The first few chapters you could see and picture the story, but after that the story is more like "meh don't want to tell a story, just let me make most things spoken and the rest doesn't matter"
Character depth: zero
Character development: zero ( i would give negative score)
details: zero

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