A Mortal's Immortal Folley

Self-Published

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Kuan Yin, a normal human, has accidently slain God themself --- via a car crash. Now forced to usurp his position as the Divine Creator, the universe has been reset and shall be formed to her whims.If only life could be so simple, right?Inspired by the Worldkeeper series; willnotfall victim to the same issues that series has.Cultivation themes from the start, but will include other power systems later on.

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Status: Hiatus
Year: 2023
Author: aphosel

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Rating: 4.4/ 5.0
Followers: 28
Views: 6,930

Chapters(16 total)

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MechalichRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Note that this review covers all material currently published, through Ch14.
As the title says, this piece feels very, almost aggressively, generic. That's not necessarily a bad thing, especially in a piece that is openly seeking to emulate the strengths of a different series (which I have not read, for the record), but it presents certain challenges to a work in terms of standing out and providing audience engagement. The result is a story that, to this point, is very readable but lacking in substance. It's kind of like store-brand cola: drinkable, still tastes good, but lacks anything memorable or a reason to buy again. I will add that 'very readable' still beats out most fiction I've encountered on this site and therefore easily remains in the four-star zone.
Style is probably this story's greatest strength. It's breezy, light, and easily understandable, with a snappy cadence and a quick push into the meat of the divine-level world management premise (though there are a few points in early chapters where the MC refers to something as 'tedious' which is not a signal that should ever be sent to the audience regarding paragraphs they are about to consume). A story written this way absolutely has the potential to be great and shares a lot of tonal and presentation DNA with very popular RR works.
It terms of story things are more mixed. The overall 'worldkeeper' framework is well-established, but there's a general feeling that things are tumbling forward just because that's what's supposed to happen rather than because anyone is doing anything. In particular there's a tendency of the MC to just react to aspects of the system as they pop up rather than expressing much desire as to what she might want or for events to take the most trope-heavy path possible - such as the appearance of Sun Wukong. This does change significantly, starting around chapter ten with the introduction of the afterlife system, however I found myself rather flummoxed by Kuan Yin's choices as they