A Mao's Tale

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Hiatus

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D33B0

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• 2005004219Royal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  Will you, reveal Nao's past, or why Mao acts insane
  As long as the balance between storytelling and explicit sex scenes.
  That said you could develope Nao's characteristics and her corruption by showing it in her sex scenes. She could be nice, normal and vanilla towards friends, or she could be malevolent, sedutive, nymphomaniac and torment bandits, rapists or whoever triggers her darker side.
  How does she feel about her actions? guilt? euphoria?
  Make her violent only when she is truly angry and hateful , otherwise she should act like a succubus, a being of deception, able to feign emotions she wants other people to see, or just show her corrupted personality: mischievous, fearful, sadistic, nurturing judging from her behavior. Her sex scenes could reveal what kind of person she is.
  For examples,ﾂ
  She toys with the bandits, pretending to let them gain control, by letting them dominate her, but slowly sapping their life out, without them noticing. Or she tells them that they will die, and stills they can't help but be moths drawn to flame, with each orgasm growing weaker, If she is really sadistic she could taunt them, telling them to endure while , they are dying, play mind games with them, brutally torturing , injuring them , for every orgasm, they make, promising a man that he can live, if he can endure her sex acts.
  On the otherhand, it can also show her morality too, as contrast to her darker side. or what her previous self is like, capable of empathy and compassion, tender lovemaking to those she doesn't want to kill.
  There's still the aftermath, you can explore how she feels, with these sex acts, murder, to see how much of her uncorrupted self remains.
  Anyway good story.