A God's Champion

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Description

This story is not complete and ends halfway through story. (There is a synopsis of the rest of the story in the last chapter)

I am sorry if the abrupt stop upset some readers. Personal issues take priority.

If my life situation changes, I may come back and rewrite the story with the changes suggested by the readers or write a different story.

Please don't Rate a story poorly because it is incomplete. That seems petty.

James was an Operator who had the misfortune to die in battle. Instead of his soul moving on to his just reward, it is intercepted, and James finds himself on a new mission. Asked to be the Champion for Ignatius, God of Embers, he finds himself in a different world, fighting impossible creatures and trying to survive. Their lives now depend on his completing the Challenge and ranking in the top 500. But the odds are stacked against him, and he was a better operator than a swordsman.

Chapters released Monday, Wednesday and Friday at 12:30

Warning: After Chapter 11, the MC undergoes a significant change of class and race. This is due to a couple of factors. The first is that when the MC was created, James didn't know what he was doing, so he picked what he thought would work. The second reason is that he had access to more information to game the system a little.

The premise is like when you buy a new video game and decide to play it without RTFM. After creating a great character and making it to the end of the first act, you realize that, although your character may be kewl, it is gimped and will not survive until the end of the game. Going back to the start, you create a new character with the knowledge you gained from playing the game and perhaps, peeking at the manual.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2022
Author: Balazar Iago

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Community Reviews(7)

TheForgottenRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Overall: I love the idea of the book. The gods have a tradition of champions in a competition. It has gotten boring, and so now the bottom gods of the competition will become demi-gods.
Our MC, James, was a US Navy Seal who died in combat and was given a chance to be a champion. Sadly for him, this is a magical world, and he doesn't get his guns.
In the first ten chapters of the book, James is one race, and then he changes to the next. So if you don't like a brawler, stay around, and you will get your sword and shield with a touch of magic.
Now the brass tacks.
Style: This is a detailed dungeon crawl book. So we go battle by battle like you would if you were playing any of the Elder scrolls. Room by room, taking out the monsters as you go. If you are looking for action, this is it; from the very start, he is fighting, and there are few chapters that he is not. I am not always a fan of this type of story as I like to see more of the why and less of the how. That being said, the combat is well done and lets you see what is happening.
Grammar: This is where I would say there is room for improvement. I get hung up on tense change, and there is quite a bit of it in some chapters, but most have a little. I like reading past tense and personally have problems reading present tense. Most of the story is in the past tense; however, there are sentences intermingled that have present tense. Punctuation seems to be fine and never stood out to me as something that I couldn't understand.
Story Score: Like I said in the overall score, the story has merit. I like that the Champions have ways to improve that the normals of the world don't and that the normals are at least stated to have an overall negative view of the champions. I would like to see this play out some.
Character score: James the MC is a SEAL, yet, he is getting pushed around by his advisor and getting outwitted by all the girls around him. Except at the very start of the book, he has been the pa
Nameless13Royal Road
★★★★ 4.0
I honestly don't understand why the story has such a low rating when I was reading it (2,5 ish stars). It may not be the most unique story since it uses a lot of popular tropes, but it is still a decent story. Must be some trolls.
I would like to give to the author one tip though: try not to show the status screen too much. I understand you want to show the rapid gains of the MC in the beginning (and that the MC needs to see it), but 2-3 large blue screens in one chapter is a bit much.
Other than that, keep up the good work.
CastleBravoRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Writing is generally good and grammar is within tolerances for RR. THe MC is supposed to be an isekai'd 42 yr old career SF soldier, but doesn't read that way to me. His erratic decision making is more like that of a teenager than someone who has "seen the elephant" and knows first-hand how shitty the world (any world, apparently) is. Still, it's overall a decent read, and at least the invisible sidekick isn't too annoying.
malinizgeldiRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
The first chapters were pretty cool and the story made itself read. but there was nothing special about the story. The dialogues seemed to be written by a very amateur and the characters were constantly contradicting themselves. especially mc. mc was normally a sergeant major around the age of 45. While the sergeant major wasn't a high rank in an army, mc was a rank who went almost exclusively on covert assassination-style missions. but the same man disregarded his own interests and started hanging out with 3 girls. Anyway, I'm not going to continue. you understood whether I suggested or not
Luc1usF0xRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
I was enjoying this story up until he starts making decision that make no sense and will directly affect his already slim chances of success.
Not to mention he's getting GOOD advice from a non malicious source and it's frustrating having him act like an idiot for unexplained reasons
It was a fun read while it lasted though, best wishes to the author
Frankcastle747Royal Road
★★★ 3.0
This story has a lot of very good parts to it and it makes you want to like it. Unfortunately for me the bad parts weigh the good parts down. I wanted to like this story more and if I would have stopped near the beginning I would rate it much higher. I kept reading hoping to see a return to the first part and to just try and find the enjoyment I had with it.
The MC is all over the place with his thought process and behaviors. The author attempts to address this but I feel like it is not tied up well. The MC ignores blatant helpful advice to just do what he wants. He also makes decisions that no one in the slightest right mind would make. Side characters around him do the same thing for no real or imagined rhyme or reason. Things like that just kill a story for me.
World building started fantastic and kind of fell off as well. I understood bit characters motivation more based on early world building. In the later stages the world made what the MC and other characters did make little sense.
Wrong words used, pacing issues, lack of direction or sense, and overall just confusion. Those are the things that stood out for me. The story has so much promise and does hit just right in several other things. Looking at the well done system, some of the side characters, partial actions by the character, and other bits and pieces you can see what the story really could be.
Author, I appreciate the story and hope you keep writing.
GamblekatRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
This is a pretty standard reincarnation story: dead Marine accepts a deal to act as a contestant in a proxy-battle between gods rather than moving on. It's well-written, but very focused on progression rather than plot. There is an entertaining dynamic between the MC and his guide, rather than the internal monologue that typically characterizes these stories. Where it loses me is that after fifteen chapters of developing the MC into a kind of warrior-monk weretiger, he suddenly finds an object that lets him respec his character from the ground up and makes the preceeding chapters pointless right at the moment it seems like he's graduating from the tutorial.