A festering world

Self-Published

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Description

A story about the apparition of the system on Earth, and the adventures of John on a festering world.

Contain a lot of mythological figures like the four horsemen, eldritchs and a shitload of gods.

Warning: This is my first story and English is not my native language so the story will probably be bad but I will try to improve.

I write this story for fun, there is currently no release schedule.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2017
Author: Nezheagruhl

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.8/ 5.0
Followers: 54
Views: 17,672

Chapters(12 total)

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Community Reviews(3)

BrokenSin69Royal Road
★★★★ 4.0
I'll admit that it's a bit early to decide how good the story is, but currently the grammar is better than some other stories. Although lacking in some detail it's acceptable for now, i also like the direction of the main characters moral compass. I'll leave an advanced review as soon as i believe ive read enough.
GigatonyRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Currently at chapter 4.
Story with enormous potential and a good LitRpg system that was established pretty quickly in the story which apparently involve Lovecraftian entities and gods. It also include a very welcome light touch of humor.
But chapters are meager and suffer from an horrendous lack of details & character development.
Despite this i can see an improvment in the following chapters with a slow decrease of those flaws but not quite enough yet.
I can see the spark of a great author but you need to put more of yourself in it if you want your story to flourish even if it means a bigger delay between chapters but i'm sure you can make this story into something great !
Montizuma59Royal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Currently at chapter 2
The story so far is great. However there needs to be a bit more explaning the MC's actions and how he feels about them. For example, how did the MC think of when he absorbed the zombie's mana, and how he felt after he got the skill for it. Or how angry was the MC after discovering that his girl friend cheated on him, as we only know he was angry enough to break up with her.
And don't worry about not being a native English speaker. Because some one I know who is a teacher told me, most of non native English students have better English grades than actual English students.
P.S. you should probably discribe how people look. At least their hair color and body build. As currently, I'm picturing Alexander as a brown haired man, wearing a black and white stripped shirt, with a pair of black pants and a beret