A dungeon core story: Magic with a hint of Science

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2018

Author

zeddthemage

• Chapter 25: Copious amount of water and fire
  May 9, 2019
• chapter 24: Cats, dogs and moving blobs of lard
  May 2, 2019
• chapter 23: All a budding village needs
  Apr 27, 2019
• chapter 22: Always bold, never old.
  Apr 9, 2019
• chapter 21: cue crazy scientist laughter
  Mar 30, 2019
• chapter 20: Walls, gates, the capital and reunions
  Mar 18, 2019
• chapter 19: Progress
  Mar 5, 2019
• chapter 18: I wanna scream, and shout, and let it all out
  Feb 19, 2019
• chapter 17: Towns and bloody inns
  Dec 11, 2018
• chapter 16: travels and bad table manners
  Dec 4, 2018
• chapter 15: Here bossy bossy bossy, Who's a good boy?
  Nov 28, 2018
• chapter 14: puppies and yellow snow
  Nov 24, 2018
• chapter 13: diggy diggy hole
  Nov 20, 2018
• interlude: map
  Nov 17, 2018
• chapter 12: snowflakes and landscapes
  Nov 15, 2018
• chapter 11: Dungeon's agent
  Nov 13, 2018
• chapter 10: Nobles, what are they good for?
  Nov 11, 2018
• chapter 9: A beast of myths and legends
  Nov 5, 2018
• chapter 8: The thing that goes bump in the blizzard
  Nov 3, 2018
• chapter 7: purpose
  Oct 30, 2018

Reviews

Community Reviews(9)

• DuskinDawkRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  The styling of the story with the writing style is well matching the story itself and its plot. Things are accurately detailed and give me a vivid image of it, but not overbearing to me or restricting my imagination. On Style: 10/10, 5 Stars.
  Next up, Grammar. Due to the author of this magnificent story saying that his first language is not English, I must say it's impressive to still use descriptive words and such. Though, the great author still has some things to improve on, such as possible revisions to the first chapters. They are missing a couple of things, but otherwise perfect.
  Phew, where to even start with the characters? Each character has a specific reason for existing, and none of it seems to be fan service except for the names, possibly. The main character is well-written with a good dynamic to make it entertaining even when alone, and the additional mains are also tailored to the story with complex and intriguing backstories that keep me guessing on what will be revealed next. A clear 5/5 Stars here, and it still seems like not enough.
  And now onto the story itself, a tale about discovery and interest with an original plot in those worlds unknown to us. Although hard to describe what exactly I enjoy about the plot, I can say that I'm a sucker for power-filled fantasy stories with the chaotic yet logical protagonist. All in all, I'd say that the constant story development matches well with the characters' dynamics, and I hope to see more.
  At last, the overall score of this. As you've seen before, my opinions hopefully shine through this screen. The style and characters are dynamic and shifting, actively moving the plot forward with calculated precision. The story's general overarching direction and arc are clear as day, but how they occur is what gets people hooked on this story with the mad scientist protag and general chaos. Although the grammar in the first few chapters are a bit choppy at points, looking past that reveals a quickly captivating story
• EleMentalPhoenixRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  If you like dungeonbuilding with a hint of story, here you go.
  It doesnt have much in terms of plot right now (the introduction of the heroine doesnt count) but it has a stable foundation with the worldbuilding.
  I really like dungeons so i really like ''even" such a 'simple' story.
  Every story isn't simple for the author, so keep up the work
• ZedrikRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  good story has great potential
  it's about a man that dies( no suprise there) and get's riencarned as a dungeon but he's a former sicentist and uses that to his advatage as well some of the mytolighy from earth
• VarkathRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  So, first off, to balance out RUSTICSOLDIER's review a bit.  There is honestly one chapter that has the interaction with the Goddess and other Gods at this point havn't been a part of the story.  Heck start of the chap tells you MC "Major culture shock there, since I'm a resolute atheist. Does this mean that capital G o.d. exists as well?" it follows to also lay down a bit of the rules that Gods work by and reason they don't involve in world.  Sooo, I would reccommend to actually read more than two chapters before a post of a story being unenjoyable as a whole, but to each their own.
  As for everything, what is out (ch.14) has shown fairly solid development.  Grammer is solid, probably an error here or there but I didn't particularly notice any.  MC applies knowledge he is expected to know based on his background and uses the things he learns appropriately.  Initial moral dillema over just killing everything that comes in sets him up to not just being a murder bot and is followed well with some parts of the growing dungeon being geared a bit towards messing with people. Dungeon challenge to bathe 4 snow leapords (lol, they are big cats, have fun adventurers) and a couple other amusing yet somewhat dangerous things to progress.
  Operating the dungeon has a nicely involved and unique method of interacting with things and growing.  New rooms take time and aren't just pay x cost for x room, etc.  Side character still needs development, but it is only chap 14 so can be fleshed out along the way and give more understanding and reasons for the action(s) she made and will make.
  Author is good enough to put a rather nice quality map in footnote after major changes were made that help to follow the dugeon build if you get lost in the text a bit was very nice.  Personally I like to be able to see how the dungeon looks and such little things that add up along many chaps.
• kspnRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  I have read what is available up to now (CH 14) and I am looking forward to reading more.
  It is in interesting concept with good potential for the future.
• titetoile11Royal Road

  ★★★ 3.0

  First i want to say this is not a bad story. Cassic dungeon story with potential. Not bad grammar. I'm enjoying it until now (chapter 15). So thank you for that
  But! A few things irk me.
  First is the style you use for dialogues. The way it is written make them feel stilted and unnatural. It just does'nt flow. It's more like each character is giving a lecture to the others than talking together. an exemle is :
  spoiler :
  When the princess explains to him the geography, that sentence :" geography 0.0.1" Who says that in a conversation?!
  end of spoiler
  The second problem i have is that your characters make illogical and stupid decisions.
  Spoilers
  Why would the MC opens himself to the outside when he's almost completely unprotected and nothing compels him to it.
  Why would the princess bound herself to a dungeon core just out of gratefullness. It's a magical oath and she's a princess. For all she knows it coud be an evil wizard inside that core who wants to create an army of undead.
  And in tha last chapter, the door to his boss room is a good idea, exept he has no way of knowing magic or strong people can't just break his doors...
  Also he has a book with a lot of knowlege but he never ask it any questions when he has to take a decision when he knows nothing of the world
  End of spoiler
  These are just a few exemples. Please make your characters a bit more logical! or smarter...
  Beside that it's not a bad story, here's hoping it gets better
• rusticsoldierRoyal Road

  ★★★ 2.5

  Okay I didn't get far. Author had a fixation on flaming God as much as he could cram it in.  Built his own idol. Which seemed to be a swim suit model. I don't mind fantasy fictions there fun. Bur this was like a spoiled angry teenager ranting about his parents not buying him a Lamborghini.
  At first it was displeasing. But it kept dragging on. Much like this review. Only my review shorter.
• j03manRoyal Road

  ★★ 2.0

  Style consists of exclusively exposition dumps thinly veiled as internal dialogue and conversation.
  Story is the barest of progression between exposition dumps.
  Characterization is bad.
  Grammar is fine.
• TerwinRoyal Road

  ★ 1.0

  MC is rather thankless, and the story is highly inconsistent.
  The biggest consistency I have seen is that both the MC and the kingdom he finds himself reincarnated in(due to a special favor granted by a goddess granted to an athiest no less) is an apparent hatred of religion(including on the parts of the godess and apparently all the other gods too, yet every village/town must have a church, and the king even paid to rebuild the one in the capitol?)
  All of which is described in loving detail in such a way that it is completley independant of the plot.
  On the plus-side, the Author did gloss over a month of pain staking carving out the dungeon, even if the design feels like it was made by a novice dungeon master so that it would frustrate more than seriously challenge(but it sounds like any anyone with a good set of lock-picks cold bypass a lot of the defenses)