A Dungeon Core

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Description

So I died, and then I was allowed to live again.

Apparantly though, gods don't really understand what 'live' means because I am now a crystal in a cave, A Dungeon Core. Whatever, I don't really mind. A Core is immortal, at least as long as it isn't killed- and that means I have an infinite amount of time to restore my old body. So I will dig in, build my defenses, and dedicate myself to recovering my body and giving it the power of the Core I have become.

But it doesn't seem like I will be left alone by the world around me...

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2018
Author: vladerag

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.0/ 5.0
Followers: 406
Views: 92,556

Chapters(19 total)

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Community Reviews(4)

FantasyRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
It touches on city building and resource management. The concept of refugees making the choice to live in a necropolis to survive is great. I'd like to see a bit more of how the dungeon's presence affects outside politics, as well as managing the dungeon inhabitants' contributions.
It's a gamble when you make the protagonist a slave. It does dampen the enjoyment factor when there's, as of yet, no way for him to free himself to strive for. The secondary character, a bit of a self-righteous do-gooder with the feel of an author insert, seems to be usurping center stage, which would be fine if she was actually presented as the lead.
It's minor, but the fight scenes could do with a little more punch. They feel floaty where individual decisions don't have much impact. Most of the deaths we're told about briefly in summary.
The writing is decent, the world-building is interesting, and the pacing is pleasantly fast (I've lost count how many dungeon stories take 10 or so chapters designing floors before anything happens). All in all, I'm satisfied, though the chapters are fairly short and half their page length is taken up by annoying ads in the notes for the author's other works.
BoredBeyondBeliefRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
Idea was interesting at first, but the girl needs to die painfully after she realises that adopting random people won't make them friendly and she gets killed and hung by them and they take over the palace.
Noah NightshardRoyal Road
★★ 1.5
The style is average neither good nor bad. It's what you found everywhere.
Same for the grammar, it doesn't poke your eyes.
The story begins with an average reincarnation into a dungeon. There isn't excessive description of a monster. The story goes bad because of its characters' behavior.
Spoiler: Spoiler
At the beginning, the MC seems to have a logical selfish reasoning but as soon as he was reincarnated he had become a pushover. I understand he doesn't want to kill innocent people but it doesn't mean to let them go for them calling the cops to you. Surrendering when the odds are against you is normal but you'll put a fight when they want to kill you. He doesn't even know what is after death for real. He had just see an aspect and didn't know if it'll be the same next time. If this isn't stupidity I don't know what to call it. He had surrendered to the Templars not some orphaned "for the gist" girl. Next the girl attracts an army of goblins to the dungeon to save some random fugitive guys (not even human) and puts her home and herself in danger. After this, the dungeon find that he shouldn't hide things from her because she's too innocent. All she wants is use him for revenge and he knows it.
I just don't like this story but maybe it's your genre.
BartimaeusRoyal Road
★ 0.5
Ok
This represents only my personal opinion of this novel!
As I read the introduction:
- original - action - drama - fantasy - gore - profanity - sexual content - traumatising content -
I was looking for a story with a theme, a good plot, a structure, and characters you as a reader can identify yourslef with, or come to terms with eg. understand them with reasonable thinking.
First the setting is ok, nothing uniqe but nothing unexpected out of a dungeon trope novel.
The structure is fine too, nothing complex that needs your mind to run parkour, we're all familiar with the stories when sb. gets overrun by a truck and reincarnates.
That the pacing picks up a lot after that is nice change, not too many paragraphs spent on elaborating where which trap is placed or what exactly a specific monster does or looks, or smells or... well you get the gist of it.
The changing pov's fit the tone of the story.
I would rate the story 4.5/5 untill it turned at chapter 10. When the dungeon core became a slave to a random teen that mysteriously popped out of nowhere a few chapters prior. Gifted with the extremly, super-rare class a dungeon master.
With that, the story takes a dive nose first through a concrete bridge into an asphalt road. Moreover the theme, style and setting change the plot is still nonexistent. That would have been the perfect time and place to evolve the plot from merely surviving/ and taking revenge into something deeper, more meaningful. However I took the effort and skimmed through the next, and for me last five chapters of the novel, though I had to realize aghast, that the story devolved into some kind of slice of life dungeon city building go happy go lucky lovestory on permanent honeymoon esque type of story.
From that point on everything that came before lost all it's meaning we lost the little plot we had, the story structure is a mess, the characters are not in sync with how they were first drafted, and the theme is; to not mess with the syst